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The Bizarre Human Element by ~staxu:iconstaxu:



I died, I think,
amid white winter blossoms
and fragile lacy things.

Then white became yellowed
and flesh became sallow,
and blossoms were traded for spiderwebs,
but not the gossamer kind.

Things got stranger, then,
when I felt my eyelids flutter
open to autumn twilight.
There was a hurt woman,
and I think I did it.

Those first few days
of breathing golden air
really got to me,
and my eyes never stopped tracing
the lines between disconnected objects.

It's funny; smelling time,
knowing futures and eating thoughts,
but I have quite a taste for dreams.

It's the bizarre human element
that I never quite shook off,
always drawing lines
and giving everyone
Christ's perfectly stippled jawline.

There is no reason,
I've learned,
but I like it all more now
knowing everything and nothing,
and knowing everything and nothing
is really only nothing.
©2006-2009 ~staxu
:iconstaxu:

Author's Comments

I asked a friend (Felix-Forever, actually) if I was genius or insane. I'm not sure what his response was, but the question came shortly after completing this poem.

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:iconbexica:
i think your an insane genius, and tbh is there anything better?

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the sun does rise
:iconangeliqu3:
teddy! :D *hugs* :) i missed u

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lil' ebil was here! :P
:iconxsilverpheonix:
I like this poem alot. One of the best ones I have read tonight =).
:icondreaming-in-red:
To be a genius is to be insane. Well done love and welcome to the eccentric club. *smiles*

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The Brat Princess
Mistress of Mayhem
Redhead with Attitude
:iconseosarlindar:
Just... erm. There's not so much you can say on something like this. It's just so... out there.

"and blossoms were traded for spiderwebs,
but not the gossamer kind."

Somehow, the spiderweb line doesn't fit. It throws off the flow. But at the same time, it works for the poem by creating an accent. I'm not sure if I love the effect or not... But meh.

Very nice overall poem. Some places could use some work, of course. Still, I wouldn't worry too much about it.

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Whatch me close, watch me careful. Just a requiem to the dead unliving, a violent shattered harp of a note splattered across your crimson stained steal blade of a heart.
:icontisaline:
The line between genius and insanity is somewhat blurred, I think.
So who knows?
:iconinmotionagain:
For some reason this makes complete sense to me.

I love it. :heart:
:iconstaxu:
You blur my lines, baby.
:iconstaxu:
You poor, poor creature.

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October 3, 2006
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